Tuesday, March 24, 2009

From the pen of...a ready and AMATEUR writer :P

So I had to write an anglo-saxon epic for school..now I know it involves a "goddess," but it was a requirement to add some sort of mystical "divine interference" ...thus the reason for the whole  goddess thing :D

Here goes...

Thea

I sit here and weep,
All my bitter tears,
over the crash of the waves.
Alone and afraid, I wander the shore
My life is in ruins, no place to go, no place to hide.
They took him...

He was my leader, 
My strong arm to lean on, the voice inside.
Hand in hand, wandering over the vast whale-road.
Watching the moon-shine disappear 
over the silver peaks.

Counting the sparkling pins of the sky,
watching the tall, regal sea-wood
float past one by one.
Relishing the warmth of the ember tongues,
and safety of the stone walls.
A prayer slipping off,
up to where He's listening.
The darkness envelops my bone-case,
But I'm safe.
He's here.

Out in his boat,
Casting into the glassy mirror,
The ripples gently rocking
And it happened...
The gentle waves turned into a hole,
A whirlpool of no escape.
What could I do but scream, shake my fists up to heaven.
"No! Not him!"

Watching him there,
drowning in the fury of the evil one.
Suffering under the torture
of the heartless sea monster.
Pulling him every which way,
what must I do?
...Then she came...goddess Adiena.
Swooping down in all her glorious magnificence.
Grasping his hand, 
up from black despair.

He lay on the sand.
Gasping...alive.
I ran across the boulders, and fell down by his side.
I turned to thank her..she was gone.
I got him back,
the one I loved most,
my beloved father. 



22 comments:

  1. I remember this :)

    p.s. none of your links under "favourites" work-I'll show you how to fix it tomorrow if you want :)

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  2. I don't know why they don't work for you...they work fine for me :P

    but sure, if you want to help me "fix it" that's not a problem :D

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  3. Those links under favorites still aren't working. :))
    Just figured I would point it out.

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  4. They did for me..I'm not sure why they're not working anymore....

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  5. They do work. The problem is that they link back to your blog and not to an external site.

    I don't know anything about blogs, but you are probably going to have to link the favorites to URL's that are outside of this blog. Right now, when one clicks on a favorite the result is a failed search of this blog.

    A possible solution: For the favorite "Grace Covenant Church" you are going to have to input the URL of the website (http://www.gcc-opc.org/) as the target/goal/endpoint.

    Basically, you have to change things around so that the result is not longer a blog search, but instead an external website.

    Good luck.
    Your bia ;)

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  6. We're not your friendly blog advisors. I have a couple ideas who might be though :)

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  7. ok...so whoever this "friendly blog improvement advisor ;)" is...PLEASE tell me who you are! I am incredibly curious to find out..lol

    Please? :D

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  8. Let's just say that your blog improvement advisor is a thankful reader of your blog who is appreciative of the example you are for him/herself as well as for his/her sister. It is unfortunate that my identity can not be revealed at this time. I hope you do not take offence to a "secret" blog reader. :)

    I will clear up the mystery as soon as I get the chance. In the meantime, I look forward to reading the newest posts and checking out your favorite links. ;))

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  9. ok...so I know you I'm guessing. I think :P
    can you at least give me a hint? where do I know you from?
    please??
    this is brutal..:P

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  10. You might remember who I am from many years ago. (That's the hint)
    Please just give me a little time and I will tell you. Due to the intense nature of my life right now I can honestly not take the time to explain. Thanks for the understanding.
    Your bia :p

    P.S. OK. Another hint: One, maybe two other readers of this blog know who I am.

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  11. Is your last name Bass?
    can you at least tell me male/female?..lol I know it sounds wierd, but it's process of elimination :P

    orrrr..what's your sister's name? :D

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  12. wait a sec...you said one, maybe two other readers of my blog know who you are...so they know you as "blog advisor" or your real person?

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  13. I think it might be Dennis. Am I right, BIA? Because both Wes and I know him too and we read your blog. And it's been many years since we used to hang out together. Hmmmm. :)

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  14. i was actually thinking the same thing :D

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  15. Your friendly blog improvement advisorMarch 31, 2009 at 2:08 AM

    What a surprise....you got me. :p
    Your deduction skills are so good that both Sherlock and myself are very impressed.
    Sorry that I had to keep the suspense so long. Wasn't my intention, but I had the craziest week of my life just now. Hope I didn't bother you. Just wanted to improve the blog a bit, OK? :D
    By the way, could I drop you a line? I need to practise my English... no joke. :))

    D-Train

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  16. yay! I was right :D
    My deduction skills are'nt actually that great..lol. Trust me, it was driving me crazy that I didn't know who you were :P So I thought really hard :)
    You're forgiven for keeping me in suspense so long..:P And the friendly blog advice was very helpful, so thank you :)
    about the "dropping me a line," thing, I'm not completely 100% sure what you mean, but sure :)...

    Naomi

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  17. Your blog improvement advisorMarch 31, 2009 at 10:19 AM

    I was much to vague. I ment if I could send you an email pertaining to things that do not have much to do with this blog. Victoria happened to pass your email along when she sent me the link to your blog.

    And you are welcome for the help. Just doing my part in helping today's youth stay on top of the technology wave. ;)

    (See, my English is better already....I slipped 'pertaining' in there) :))

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  18. feel free...emails are always good :)

    'pertaining'...very impressive..lol. (you must have been homeschooled at one point in time :D)

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  19. Your blog improvement advisorMarch 31, 2009 at 10:38 AM

    That's quite possible!! Wow, are you sure your deduction skills are no good?! ;)

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  20. lol..positive. It was just a wild guess :D

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  21. wow Naomi you did have a little conversation with my bro. i should have come on here more often and then i could ahve right away told you it was my bro. sorry, i have been a bit busy tho.
    i think dennis writes you more then he writes me.. hehe.
    anyways have a good weekend. thansk for the talk yesterday it ws really good..
    love you
    :D

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